Georgia Heard, in Awakening the Heart, introduces the reader to a variety of craft elements to implement into poetry. She refers to these tools as a poetry toolbox.
Column I focuses on helping the reader experience the poem through visual tools.
Column II focuses on the sound and rhythm of the poem.
On the left side was draft one. I had just wrote this poem and did not know if I would ever come back to it. I really liked the meaning of the poem and how the beginning and end are similar.
When I did decide to revisit it, I separated it into stanzas, took out extra words, and lines I did not like.
The right side, was yet another draft. I rewrote my poem and inserted the stanzas and line breaks where I thought it needed to be emphasized (but, love, religion, and wisdom). In this draft I also worked on word choice. I thought about words I could use in place of other words- some worked and others did not.
Lastly, is my final piece, you can still notice a few minor changes.
When I was writing, my major takeaways from Heard were: word choice, line breaks, and the beginning/ending. I feel like the use of contractions (you'll and you've) make the text more personal because it is written like I would say it.
There were tons of other craft elements that I could've implemented but I did not feel lead to do so.
Heard, G. (1999). Awakening the heart: Exploring poetry in elementary and middle school. Portsmouth, NH: Heinemann.
I like that you added the picture of the page from Heard's book so that the reader can follow along with what you are doing. I also think your revisions work very well and really made your poem better!